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Friday, June 29, 2018

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Volume 1                                        Page 1      27 June 2018
 A teenage boy left his home, without telling his parents
or taking his phone!
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A Teenage boy with cancer has escaped          The Parents of Mark have been
his house and his friend says “Mark only          very worried and so has his best
escaped his house to do what he always          friend Jesse who says “Across far
wanted to do, Climb Mount Rainier.” The         dark miles, a friend can still hold
teenage boy is by the name of Mark and         your hand and be there with you,
the police have been looking for Mark and      but now I can’t.” The boy still hasn’t
the only way to get out of the town is by          been found yet and Jesse hasn’t


train so the police have been to the train             gone to school since he was lost or
station but haven't found any clues. The             gone home because Jesse wanted
boy was found missing on the 21 of May             to stay with Marks parents until
and their parents say that Mark took his              Mark comes back. The police are
dog with himself too because his dog                  at Mount Rainier and are keeping
wasn’t at home and never leaves to go                an eye out if they see Mark but they
anywhere.                                                            Still haven't found him.


The police have been called recently             Police are still looking for mark
and said that they saw a boy with a               and if you see him then please
dog heading to Washington DC but               report to the police because
it seemed like a kid trying to make                 everybody is worried about Mark
his voice like a grown ups so the                     who is a strong boy with cancer but
police have immediately went to                     still has faith in him.
but still has faith in himself.     
but still has faith in himself.
where the phone call had come
from and went to investigate it.
The phone call had come from
a shop and the owners say that
they saw a bruised and hurt
boy along with his dog, they
say that when they wanted to
call the police the boy said
no and started panicking so
they let the boy call someone.
After that the oy left the shop
and they say that they don’t
know where he went or how
he got hurt.
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Volume 1                                        Page 2      27 June 2018
Want to be an editor? Be like me!
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A lot of people want to be a                          I had sent my first story to
newspaper editor but they                             the newspaper makers and
need to learn how to do it                              they said that they liked it,
perfectly. In this part of the                            but they had changed some
newspaper, I will be writing                          things but it was still fine and
how it is editing and writing                          I liked it. I started sending
a newspaper. But here is a                             stories for the newspapers
little bit about me. My first                             and comments for what they
job was at the checkout at                              could improve on and since I
Paknsave but I had a passion                          kept doing it, they hired me as
for writing stories. I started                             an editor because they thought
editing newspapers in 1998                            that my improvements that I gave
and have still done it until                                to them were really helpful.
now and I have written some                       
newspaper stories too. Here                          Something challenging was
is how I have settled in with                           changing the words because
being an editor.                                               some of them used words that
                                                                       weren’t interesting and were
                                                                        just plain words so I had to find
                                                                        perfect words that would suit
                                                                        that. I had to work most of the
                                                                        time and it was really stressing for
                                                                        my brain but since I kept doing
                                                                        that my brain has gotten used
                                                                        to it and at first it was pretty
                                                                        challenging but now I find it
                                                                        very easy.
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Hey Bloggers! I'm back! Anway, in my class, we have been writing newspapers which is something new for me because I don't write newspapers and I didn't how to write newspapers but now I do thanks to our wonderful teachers! We had to write our newspapers o this site but mine wouldn't let me type so I had to do mine on a google doc which was pretty challenging and took a long time but it turned out great. To be successful at writing newspapers then you must have these things in it... 

  • Headline must have pun, rhyme or alliteration
  • Have an intro that has the 5 w's
  • In sections or paragraphs
  • Past tense
  • 3rd person
  • Includes a quote
  • Used speech marks around the quote
  • Ends with a conclusion
Do you think I have done all of them?
I would love for feedback on what I could improve on next time and if you have any questions then please ask!

2 comments:

  1. Hi Parwin, Its Bridget Here from yaldhurst Model school. I love Your newspaper report it is so catching,It is just so so awesome. You have made a few mastakes like you wrote this line twice. but still has faith in himself/Did you proof read it? Other then that It is all looking great.

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  2. Hey There Bridget,
    thank you for commenting on my blog and yes I will proofread it again and make sure that I have no mistakes in it but still thank you!

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