Thursday, July 28, 2016
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Wow Parwin! i just love the imagery and imagination you have infused all through this writing. I am also glad there was a happy ending with lots of hugging. I am left wondering what magic was coming out of the stick. I am also left wondering why he had to find his dad. Where had his dad gone?Had he been captured or was he lost?
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your writing and I look forward to your next blog post.
Good job Parwin your story makes good sense and is interesting to read. I like that Liams father is dancing of the beach. Maybe don't make it so big that it fills the page.
ReplyDeleteHello parwin I like how you used lots of imagination Next time maybe incude what happend to his dad why did you call him bean Because that is a funny name =p
ReplyDeleteI love the detail that you have in your story, Parwin. I know that there are pictures on every page, but your words add to the pictures and make the story even better. Can you make it smaller so the traffic feed is not in the way? I am looking forward to your next creation.
ReplyDeleteHi there, my name is Ella and I am a student in Room 5 at Awahono School. I really like your story and how you have let your imagination run wild. It made me think of the time when I walked up a track and got lost and then became reunited with my family. Have you thought about adding the 'd' on the end of wizard on slide 6. Once again your story was really imaginative and I liked the pictures that you put with it, because the story really fitted with each picture.
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