The wonderful yaldhurst school goes to the south new brighton beach
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P1: What a beautiful day to go to the beach whoops sorry anyway hello this Parwin from 104 news. Anyway I am with the wonderful Yaldhurst Model School because year 4 , 5, 6, 7, and year 8 are going to South New Brighton beach so that they can learn about beach safety.
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P2: Jedi from Yaldhurst model school has told me that they went to the beach by a bus and they have also told me that you must be sun smart otherwise you can’t go to the beach.
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P3: One of the teachers by the name of MR. M has told me that the children and him had lot’s of fun but the water was a bit cold.
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Conclusion: At the end the children were feeling really happy and bit tired as well. Anyway it has been fun being with Yaldhurst Model School but for now I have to say goodbye so BYE!
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Positive: Excellent use of paragraphs that divides the report into a logical sequence. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThoughtful: Great that attention is being paid to being Sunsmart as this keeps us all safe.
Helpful: I look forward to seeing consistent use of capitals in your next blog post. e.g. Yaldhurst Model School.
Great work. Keep it up!