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Wednesday, September 13, 2017

The Living Dead Girl! (Story)


           Hope you enjoy my story!
(What do you think I could do next time?)
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2 comments:

  1. Mrs SpraggSeptember 13, 2017 at 12:54 PM

    Hi Parwin,

    What an interesting story. I felt very sorry for Elena because it seems as though the only reason people called her names and were unkind to her was because of her clothes. Do you think this is right Parwin?

    Something you could do to improve your writing is to re-read it so that you pick up any small errors. This will help the flow.

    Thank you for sharing your story.
    Mrs Spragg

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    1. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2017 at 2:43 PM

      Thank you for your positive comment and I will make sure that I re read it next time. No i don't think it is right for people to do that to ELena. ANyway thank you for your comment!

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