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Tuesday, May 26, 2015

I was walking through a dark forest.
Trees were surrounding me.
Suddenly I fell in a deep dark hole.
It took a long time to get to the bottom and when i did i found a chest.
when i looked in the chest i saw gold and diamond.
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7 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 27, 2015 at 11:10 AM

    Hi Parwin,
    I can visualise where you are in my head. This piece of writing paints a very vivid picture in my mind. Remeber your puncuation.

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  2. AnonymousMay 27, 2015 at 11:11 AM

    Hi Parwin, The sentences you have written are outstanding.You have used lots of description in your writing. Keep up the good work .
    p.s When you write the letter i use the capital letter for I like that because it looks a lot better
    when you use cap :)

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  3. AnonymousMay 28, 2015 at 9:14 AM

    thank you

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  4. AnonymousMay 28, 2015 at 9:14 AM

    thank you

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  5. AnonymousMay 28, 2015 at 9:14 AM

    thank you

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  6. AnonymousMay 29, 2015 at 9:50 AM

    Very good.

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